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Wednesday, June 13, 2018

Don't Look!



Seriously, PLEASE don't LOOK anymore.

Everyone has at least one pet peeve word, and every editor usually has a few. For me, one of my biggest is the word LOOK (and its variations).

It's not that the word can't or doesn't need to be used on occasion; the issue is that it doesn't reveal anything at all--no descriptive, no emotion, no tension, no experience.  All Telling, no Showing.

For example, what exactly is happening in this sentence:

David looked at Emma.

Why is David looking at Emma?  How is he looking at her?  Is he happy to see her? Is he wary of her presence?  Is he scared of her or sad they have to meet this way?

Or this sentence:

She looked out the window.

What is she looking at?  How is she looking?  Why is she looking?  Is she excited at what she sees?  Does she actually see anything at all or is she just taking a moment to gather her thoughts?  Is she wary or tense or scared?  Mad, glad, sad?

If that many different scenarios can be thought of for one sentence, then you as an author are not painting your scene for the reader. 

Here are some examples of stronger variations:

David narrowed his gaze as he studied Emma's tight posture. 
or
David released his held breath as he turned to find Emma's glorious smile aimed right at him.

She frowned and stared out the window to the storm raging as fiercely as her emotions.
or
She cast her gaze out the window to soak up a moment of peace from the early morning sunshine sparkling across the lake.  

Word choices--verb choices--are extremely important to ensure a reader not only pictures your scene in vivid detail in their own mind, but to make them experience the moment with the characters.

Strong word choice can change a scene dramatically, so don't choose simple words like "look" that Tell the mere basics.  Instead, choose your words wisely to Show and engage your reader in the depth of your character in that particular moment.


@bystacydawn 2018

Sunday, June 10, 2018

Practice Makes Progress

I have been slowly working in the background practicing and experimenting for a project I've had in mind for a while now.  With a busy family and working two jobs, it will still take time to put it all together, but that's okay, because I am working daily toward that goal even if just five minutes a day...and as with most of my ideas, the end result will of course be with writers in mind.๐Ÿ˜‰  

For now, I thought I would share some of the fun practice pieces.  I'm thinking I might even create them into a final form some day.  




These are from my Scribbles That Matter journal that I fill with doodles and random ideas to play around with lettering and coloring.  It has thicker paper, which works great for various mediums from colored pencils to watercolors.  

Everyone needs a miscellaneous journal or notebook they can do anything in from random notes to doodling or sketching, poetry or writing, but most importantly, to mess up, make mistakes, scratch out, circle furiously what works, and make funny things out of what doesn't.  A place no one else has to see if you don't want them to and where ANYTHING goes.  Because it's the practice and progress that really count.

You learn far more from the mistakes than the finished pieces.๐Ÿ˜‰